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Sailor Hera. Isabel Victoria Albin. The MYTHOS Organization.

I apologize for allowing this application to sit for so long. I was quite busy and each time I sat down to review, something else came up that I had to take care of.

Civilian Overview

Occupation & Student Involvements
This is just a minor change, but I think it'd be great if you changed Isabel's internship from a hotel to an actual event planning service. There are actually a surprising number in Columbus, and it's fairly easy to get a wedding/event planning internship. You could also take this and make a few more NPCs for Isa, whose only "relation" is her ex-hubby. Maybe she's good friends with a co-worker or her boss?

Majors & Minors
I love love love that you made Hera a hospitality management major. So awesome. Win.

Likes & Dislikes & Hobbies

You've got a good start here with these, but I've got a few things to address. First, I'd like to a little more here. Valdis/Ares is a really good example of a lot of really decent, interesting likes.

Second, I'd like for you to get a little more specific with the likes and dislikes. The best examples I can give for this are in the dislikes section. Isabel dislikes 'infidelity', but no one really likes infidelity. You can take this, though and phrase to make it more personal, like: 'goddamned cheating bastards, especially when they're named Bryan' it makes the like less generic 'everyone hates this' and more specific to the character. She also dislikes relative things, like 'emo' 'angst' and 'stupidity': what's stupid to one person could be hilarious/genius to another (example: NASCAR, sorry Ande). You could change these by making them more personal to the character or just making them more specific in general (i.e. stupidity can be cut down into 'immature pranks/humor' 'people who are academically less skilled than Isabel' or 'people who seem to have no common sense).

Personality

I really love Isabel's personality. She is so perfect and wonderful—but only in her own eyes, and you've recognized this. She's a very realistic person and you've balanced her out with funny and interesting faults. The writing style is great, too, because it's almost like you're channeling Isabel so that it's not just the information provided that describes her but the writing itself that gives me an idea of what she's like. My favorite aspect of Isabel's personality was this:

"Her attempts to "take care of" her friends and acquaintances can range from advice and actions that are appreciated and actually helpful to giving heaping doses of unsolicited, unwanted advice all the way up to a terrible case of "just let me do it," with a heavy implication of "because you'll never get it right.""

History
I really like how the history played out. It was very cool, and you've definitely set up a realistic older transfer student. She's going to be busy, but she's the type of person who can handle being busy, so it'll be interesting to see her juggle everything in play.

Sailor Soldier Overview

Locket
I really love the locket, it sounds pretty and manages to not just be a "circle with stuff on it" while avoiding becoming too ridiculously clunky. Great job here.

Signature Attack

ROFL While I totally love that you've "gone there" with the menstrual cycle, I think the mental associations with the red curse just make this attack a little too gross. XD I discussed it with several other members and they agree that this attack goes a little bit overboard (I know, we're all so uptight. Weep). So I ask that you come up with a new attack. I suggest that, rather than just trying to come up with a sphere for 'womanhood' of all things, maybe exploring some of the bigger myths associated with Hera and coming up with an attack through that.

For example: Zeus and Hera were known to get into fights that caused Mount Olympus to shake. The clashing winds during storms were symbolic of their arguments. Hera was chained to a cloud by her hands with golden shackles, and then weighted with anvils tied to her feet after what she did to Heracles. Hera was said to have bathed in a pool that restored her virginity.

You could even possibly rework the skill "bonds of matrimony" to make it into a signature attack.

Skills

Bonds of Matrimony is definitely interesting, and should be kept. In fact, if you're hard pressed for a new signature attack, this could easily become the new signature ability. My suggestion with this is to further explore the idea of marriage and incorporate some other aspects of wedlock aside from just the sharing strength. Marriages can create dependency, quarrels, strength, or weakness; they can be a blessing or a burden, yeah?

Having just one skill is fine, but since Hera is such a prominent and powerful figure of Greek mythology, I'd like to see a few more skills. These skills don't even have to be useful in battle. Amphitrite and Aphrodite have examples of skills that aren't necessarily useful but that really help to identify them as the soldier of beauty and happiness and the soldier of fish.

Strengths: You have a really great character here, she's got a very believable personality that's been well balanced. Her attitude makes her realistic and funny to readers, and although her teammates may have a hard time with her, she's the kind of character that people love to see in literature. Her story is great, too, and, despite cheating and a divorce, is not laden with sorrow and angst. Great job.

What I loved: The personality, the history, the locket

Suggestions: I was really waffling about what verdict to give Isabel, but the signature attack pushed the weight toward 'Revisions Requested'. I'm really going to have to see a new signature attack and I would LOVE LOVE LOVE to see some cool extra skills, abilities and traits for Sailor Hera. If you're really lost, you can post on the forums asking for suggestions and I'm sure everyone will have at least something small to suggest. I've already covered the other things above. Overall, you really don't need to make any major character changes; it's just a few things that need tweaking. I really look forward to any revisions.

Verdict: Revisions Requested! (ZOMG, please make the changes and resubmit)